Betty wasn’t supposed to find the body. The housekeeper was usually the first to bring trash to the dumpster in the morning. But someone had left an empty champagne bottle on the picnic table where Betty was about to eat breakfast, and she hated a mess.
She lifted the lid on the dumpster and there he was. Feet up. Head buried in the bottles and cans. Wearing the same khaki pants and pink golf shirt from the day before.
The man from the zoning board.
An hour later, Betty was waiting to give her official statement to the police. Everyone from the Motor Court seemed to have gathered on the lawn to see what the sweet old granny in room six had found.
Eleanor, tall and blond, stomped toward Betty. She kicked the housekeeping wagon, left haphazardly on the edge of the lawn. A bucket fell, spilling a toilet bowl brush, glass cleaner and some cloths. A roll of toilet paper bounced a few feet away.
“I hoped the ambulance was here for you, Betty. I guess it’s not my lucky day.” These were Eleanor’s first words to Betty in two weeks.
Eleanor stood, hands on hips, long hair mussed from the night and dark circles under her eyes. She was in her late thirties, but she looked older, with the early morning sun casting heavy shadows over her thin face. The gathered crowd inched away from them. A little boy asked if he was ever going to eat breakfast.
I like the little details in the writing. A good investigation also. Thank you for the entertainment.
The Motor Court was the best mystery short story I've read in a long time. I'm sure she'll have success with her novel.
Great story. Fascinating characters and a nicely solved mystery. Good job.
I like a good mystery, and this one is so very well developed! Interesting characters, clever twist and turns, well done indeed!
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Great characters, nice wrap-up.
Great story. Well timed and a good finish.
I loved this story! Great characterizations.
Terrific story! Great plot and plot twist. Well-developed characters. Wonderful setting details that put a reader right there. One of the best I've read in this magazine, and I've liked quite a few!
Good story, would like to see more like it.
A fun read. Enjoyed the twist at the end. Nicely developed characters. I'd definitely read more by this author.
A good read. Nice job. Congrats!
I enjoyed this. Full stop. But something was nagging at me. It occurred to me later: would Betty have ratted out someone who had done exactly what she had for exactly the same reason? She seemed more compassionate than that. Also; did I read correctly that the college girl got knocked up on purpose? That seemed wildly implausible. Accidentally, sure, but on purpose harkens back to the 1950s.